ok here is a little part of a story i started. I’m 14 and not really experienced in writing, but its something i really enjoy doing on my spare time. But Im not really sure how and when to begin a new paragraph and stuff. My spelling isn’t so great. I’m just wondering if my style is too young and boring. If it is than please tell me what i can do to improve. anything will help. Thank you!
“Get up!” my mom shook me, “you cant be late for school”
“im getting up” then she left the room. Shes right, I shouldn’t be late on the first day of school. So I got up unwillingly and stretched my arms high over my head, as if trying to touch the ceiling..which I was very far from. I’m such a shorty i complained to myself.
I took a hot shower, than put on a little makeup though more than usual, I left my hair how it was naturally, curly. Then searched my closet for something to wear, I found a cute pink blouse my mom had bout me during our trip to California to see my dad a couple of months ago. Than I got some cute yellow shorts but realized it was a little cold by looking out my window so I added some gray leggings. Got my boots on and a scarf, then took one last look in the mirror, I was satisfied enough.
I could smell pancakes my mom had maid especially for today. So I ran down the stairs jumping over the last two.
“Smells good mom,” I spotted my pancake on the table with whip cream and strawberries. “Looks great.”
“Thank you doesn’t it?” she gave the pancakes a goodbye look. “well enjoy, but hurry up u only have 5min till Miss. Angel gets here”
Juli said she would give me a ride, I had totally forgotten.I stuffed the pancakes down, a little to fast to enjoy them though. But I thanked my mom again and then ran upstairs and brushed my teeth. I heard the door bell ring so I finished fixing my hair in the mirror and ran down the stairs the same as before jumping over the last two. Juli was there waiting patiently,
“Hey, Jen! You look cute!” she gave me a hug.
“so do u!” I liked the green shirt against her red hair. Her red hair, “Oh my gosh Juli you cut your hair!” it looked super cute, it was now a little above her shoulders instead of her waste.
“yep” she smiled
“it looks super cute! I like it short like that! When’d u get it done?”
“Thank you! Umm not yesterday but the day before” she was full of energy when she talked, just like me. I think it was all the anxiety of being a freshman.
“well we should go,” she continued “ my moms waiting outside”
“ok! Bye mom!” I gave her a kiss
“bye sweetie”
“bye Miss Gavet!” Juli waved as she was half way out the door.
“bye Juli, have a good day girls! Love you!”
“love you to mom.” I shut the door behind me before we said anymore goodbyes. It was cold outside, summer didn’t last very long in Washington, but ohh well I like the cold. But maybe I should have dressed warmer? No, ill be fine, I reassured myself.
When I got to the car Miss. Angel greeted me with a hug, and asked how things were.
When we got into the shiny bug car I realized how cold I had been, it was so warm, it felt good in the car.
It was quiet for a while but than Juli asked the question I was trying to avoid.
“So how was your day at Jeffs house?” she smiled. We broke up I told myself ….Well actually he broke up with me but I wanted it to happen, so technically WE broke up.
“umm” I didn’t know what to say, “ well actually nothing happened like u expected”
Her smile started to fade “wait? U didn’t?” she was gonna say kiss, but she knew I knew.
“nope…the opposite sorta”
Now she looked confused. “Opposite?” she repeated a couple of times.
“ok the truth is…well,well we broke up.”
She didn’t say anything for I while, and I couldn’t read her face, it was so blank. Then she smiled.
“ohh good!” she praised.
“what?!” I asked, with a question already answered.. “ I thought u were going to be like,”
Then I imitated Julis voice as well as I could. “oh my gosh why you guys were like so perfect, bla bla.”
She gave me a look of disgust. “no no no, you have got it all wrong, all a long I thought you guys were kind of like a Bad match..” my jaw dropped, than she raised her hand. “but you gotta understand I told you that you guys were cute together and all because I didn’t want to hurt your feelings.”
Ohh? Now I was the confused one.
“well thanks a lot, next time you get a bad match I ll remember to tell you you look perfect together..” I gave her a jokingly smile.. “next time just tell me? No biggy k?”
“ok” she smiled
“plus I didn’t really like him a whole lot, he was kinda too short”
“hahaha!” she exploded.. “kinda too short?! Don’t you realize that you are like a foot shorter than him?” I was about to explain to her that it didn’t matter he was still short for a guy, but then Horizon high school stopped me and Juli both from breathing. Miss Angel stopped were all the other moms were stopping to drop of their kids. There was so many people, some guys had mustaches, probably
there is a whole lot more to this chapter but i just wanted to give you and idea how i write.
I only read one paragraph but so far it sounds really good thought. It has detail, sounds like something that can be found in a book. Anybody has a chance in writing. This quote applies to everything.."the more you do it..the better you get at it."
christmas show dec 2009
Omar smashes this kid max. HAHA
Horizon high school dance team stingers at the flash dance 2010 “one more night ” by prisilla
I’ll need it
horizon high school dance team stingers flashdance jan-2010 “bounce”